P.E. EXAM - EXPERIENCE 4A FORM

I have submitted my experience to the State twice already with a response both times that I am not detailed enough in my experience descriptions. To avoid submitting for a fourth time I have decided to post my experience that I will be submitting again. Please, any constructive criticism would be helpful as the State was not willing to provide any (I have called and e-mailed them and got nothing but vague responses....a little hypocritical if you ask me). Anyways, attached is my experience, I tried referencing the code but I did not reference paragraphs or sections because I thought that would be tedious and nothing but fluff that would seem to be filling the pages. The examiner probably would have no clue anyways. I am sure he or she does not have the ASHRAE Handbooks on hand.

Any help would be appreciated. Unfortunately I do not know any P.E.'s that have recently gone through this <a href="https://www.eng-tips.com/viewthread.cfm?qid=381490#" target="_blank" rel="nofollow noopener noreferrer">PE EXAM EXPERIENCE - FORM 4A - How to Improve Myself - Eng-Tips</a>.

Thanks!